Congrats on starting! I see nothing wrong with your first attempt. It's only bad if you never start!!!
LuAnn Kessi says to get a sketch pad and practice your FMQ there first. Don't pick up the pencil point from the paper - make your designs with continuous motion. Using a sketch pad and pencil builds muscle memory. Once you practice it on a sketch pad, your brain will have a good idea of movement and where to twist and turn. I did stippling for about a year before really trying anything ornate. I did some thread painting and more stippling. Finally, I got the sketch pad and worked out the designs on paper first, then when I was happy with them, I went to the machine. Guess what? The machine quilting was better than my drawings!
Watch Leah Day do her quilting:
www.daystyledesigns.com/365project.htm She explains how to work a design and how to get out of corners if you get stuck. She's got lots of designs to choose from and they are in categories so you can pick easier ones to start with.
LuAnn Kessi, as I've said, is a sketch book believer.
http://luannkessi.blogspot.com/searc.../Sketch%20Book
She has sketches of her sketches. You should sign up for her blog because she is always sketching. I printed out some of the sketches and traced over them, then tried to do them myself, sometimes with good results and sometimes with not so good results, but always worth the effort.
Patsy Thompson has some excellent beginning FMQ videos.
http://www.patsythompsondesigns.com/free-video/
She has lots of FMQ designs you can download for free. I downloaded them and traced out the patterns.
You will definitely build your confidence if you look at the above websites. You've already got a good start on your FMQ and you will be so happy with your results when you master some basic designs. You won't want to stop! LuAnn says to FMQ or sketch a little everyday.
Here is a video that will also help you build your confidence. Karen talks about "What to Quilt on Your Quilt."
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=emNxO...ature=youtu.be
Good luck and keep posting!