[QUOTE=ghostrider;7324458]An easy way to see where your values are 'off' is to change your photos to black and white. It eliminates the distraction of color. I took the liberty of doing that to the one you posted.
See if it helps you get an idea of where to make placement changes, add value steps, etc. Your idea has great potential and you've made a very strong start; keep going!![/QUOTE
Brilliant idea!